Shaer tarteeb dain.......

[Hoorain]

Yeah Maybe.. but aapka zoak k adding last mei voh bhi funny the
khair let see annu kia kahte hain..

oopsh
i thought zoak takhalus hay (poet jo name use karte hain na last shaer may ) wo hay shayed

jaise ghalib uncle ya iqbal uncle aksar use kartey hain

dhundhta phirta hoon aey IQBAL apne aapko
khud hi goya manzil khud hi musafir hoon main

jaise is may iqbal use hua hay


anywayz annu bta do ab kia tajasus hay bhae

 

[Hoorain]

main ne to is tarha suna hai..

Hazaro kam hain zoak dunya me karne ko
jo log kuch nhi karte kamal karte hain

ahaaaan gud one

meko aik point do itna bhi ghalat nhi tha maira

phir se aapki baari

 

[Sabah]

oopsh
i thought zoak takhalus hay (poet jo name use karte hain na last shaer may ) wo hay shayed

jaise ghalib uncle ya iqbal uncle aksar use kartey hain

dhundhta phirta hoon aey IQBAL apne aapko
khud hi goya manzil khud hi musafir hoon main

jaise is may iqbal use hua hay


anywayz annu bta do ab kia tajasus hay bhae

ohhhh ab kia kahe aapke guessing k bare mei

 

[Sabah]

main ne to is tarha suna hai..

Hazaro kam hain zoak dunya me karne ko
jo log kuch nhi karte kamal karte hain

humara dusra line tu aapke he terha the hame tu 5 points melne chahye

 

[Qawareer]

hahhaha..kamal karti hain ap b
ok
ab shair likhen..

 

[Hoorain]

ohhhh ab kia kahe aapke guessing k bare mei

shabash kahain filhaal to

guess theek tha maira
zoak takhalus hi hay

 

[Sabah]

shabash kahain filhaal to

guess theek tha maira
zoak takhalus hi hay

Really ... acha ji Afreen Sis

 

[saviou]

yahan tarteeb ho rahi hai ya ladayi

 

[Hoorain]

next sher main deti hoon


benoori nargis roti hay saal hazaron apni
mushkil se hota hay paida barri deedawar chaman may

 

[Sabah]

kia hai k humare urdu itne sahi bhi nahin tu jitna guess kiya uska bhi shuker manate hu and hame bhi shabash melne chahye...

 

[Hoorain]

yahan tarteeb ho rahi hai ya ladayi

ha
in lrayi kahan hoing bhaya

aap ko barraa shauq hay lrayi karwane ka

kaho to poora kar doon shauq

 

[Sabah]

yahan tarteeb ho rahi hai ya ladayi

Terteeb he hurahe hain but ghalat

 

[Hoorain]

kia hai k humare urdu itne sahi bhi nahin tu jitna guess kiya uska bhi shuker manate hu and hame bhi shabash melne chahye...

it's really nice attempt

shabaaash bacha jeeti rho khush rho
popcorn khaao

 

[Sabah]

next sher main deti hoon


benoori nargis roti hay saal hazaron apni
mushkil se hota hay paida barri deedawar chaman may

Hazaron saal roti hain benoori apni "nargis"
mushkil se hota hay paida barri deedawar chaman may


hayee?? aapka 2nd line tu already arranged lagti hain

 

[Sabah]

it's really nice attempt

shabaaash bacha jeeti rho khush rho
popcorn khaao

Thank you

 

[saviou]

ha
in lrayi kahan hoing bhaya

aap ko barraa shauq hay lrayi karwane ka

kaho to poora kar doon shauq

neiki aur pooch pooch

 

[saviou]

Terteeb he hurahe hain but ghalat

ab ladkian milkar galat nahi to kya shai tarteeb dengi

 

[Hoorain]

Hazaron saal roti hain benoori apni "nargis"
mushkil se hota hay paida barri deedawar chaman may


hayee?? aapka 2nd line tu already arranged lagti hain

nops it's not

hazaron saal nargiz apni benoori pe roti hay
barri mushkil se hota hay chaman may deedawar paida


by IQBAL uncle

next aap dain

 

[Qawareer]

Hazaar saal nargis apni benoori pe roti hai
Badi Mushkil se hota hai chaman mein deedawar paida

 

[Qawareer]

hmmm ab sabah siso ki bari...